Essays submitted to the History Department should not use the social science style of notation, in which authors’ names are placed in the text in brackets and complete references are in the Bibliography.
Do not use endnote\n12/24/2019 13:21 PM: Introduction— simply introduce Wang Jingwei and focus more on himself — hy he is so controversial, cut the long-winded story telling.
Provide more DETAILED arguments and evidences for why Wang collaborated with the Japanese, and why he is/ is not a traitor. More numbers in the inflation and 3 all policy part.
Most historians— who? Be specific!
Write like a lawyer to defend/ oppose against the claims, delve deeper. Focus more on Wang himself.\n12/24/2019 13:22 PM: Use more primary documents, less internet sources.
More research on historical facts, NO story telling.
More arguments but do not turn the paper into a paper simply presenting the arguments from both sides. Summarise, and have your own argument.
Delve deeper!\n12/24/2019 13:22 PM: Footnoting: footnote 16, China War Reporters by Parks Coble, What is the page number?\n12/27/2019 07:42 AM: Criteria: essay is clear, coherent, and effectively organised
Contains well-developed critical analysis that is focused on the research question. Argues to a reasoned conclusion that is consistent with the evidence and arguments provided\n12/27/2019 07:42 AM: Pls include some historian’s view, with names, in the essay
Also evaluate and delve deeper on why and how Wang is perceived as a traitor\n12/27/2019 07:42 AM: show awareness of different perspectives and more importantly, these perspectives must be evaluated. Here are some simple examples :
However, some historians such as ABC, XYZ are less optimistic and claim ….
What historians BBB and GFG perhaps fail to consider is the aspects of certain roles …….\n12/29/2019 04:55 AM: Again, pls focus on more perspectives but not only Chiang vs Wang,
You can quote from some historians like the previous drafts but EVALUATE their views as well.
show awareness of different perspectives and more importantly, these perspectives must be evaluated. Here are some simple examples : However, some historians such as ABC, XYZ are less optimistic and claim …. What historians ABC and XYZ perhaps fail to consider is the aspects of certain…
Use these sentence structures.\n12/31/2019 02:08 AM: Much better, but pls do not start a new section on historian’s perspectives, you may use few sentences there to as topic sentences in each paragraph.
Also, for the introduction, pls focus more on Wang as a controversial figure and state the central argument of the essay in the first paragraph.
Remember to delve deeper and NO STORY TELLING. improve on the arguments and the language used.
Make sure the footnoting follows the guideline.